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30 Sep 2014 10:50


30 Sep 2014 10:50
rinki sharma
New Member
30 Sep 2014 10:50

mein jayadatar sarey hi serials dekhna pasand karti hoon, lekin dance india dance mera sabsey pasandidar serial hai, kyunki mujhey issey bahut kuch sikhney ko milta hai.. mujhey khud bhi dance karna bahut pasand hai.. mujhey issey dance k different steps,techniques aur styles pata chaltey hain.. mera favourite judge abc hai kyunki wo in teeno me subse alag hai..
 
mostly i see all serials but dance india dance is my favourite one,because i learn so many things from this serial.. i also like to dance.. i learn different steps,techniques and styles from this.. my favourite judge is abc as he is totally different among these three judges..


30 Sep 2014 13:25
Jagdish2014
Member
30 Sep 2014 13:25
rinki sharma - 30 Sep 2014 10:50

mein jayadatar sarey hi serials dekhna pasand karti hoon, lekin dance india dance mera sabsey pasandidar serial hai, kyunki mujhey issey bahut kuch sikhney ko milta hai.. mujhey khud bhi dance karna bahut pasand hai.. mujhey issey dance k different steps,techniques aur styles pata chaltey hain.. mera favourite judge abc hai kyunki wo in teeno me subse alag hai..
 
Mostly I see all serials but Dance India Dance is my favourite one,because I learn so many things from this serial.. I also like to dance.. I learn different steps,techniques and styles from this.. My favourite judge is abc as he is totally different among these three judges..[/quote
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You have expressed yourself nicely.Congrats!!!
Few capitals added.
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Regard
Jagdish


30 Sep 2014 14:17
gvshwnth
Moderator
30 Sep 2014 14:17

Agree with Jagdish.
Regards
GV


30 Sep 2014 19:06
rinki sharma
New Member
30 Sep 2014 19:06

Thank you Jagdish sir and GV sir.. 😊


30 Sep 2014 21:15
Kit13
Member
30 Sep 2014 21:15

Mostly i watch all the serials/shows but Dance India Dance is my favourite one, because I learn so many things from this serial/show.. I also like to dance.. I learn different steps,techniques and styles from this.. my favourite judge is abc as he is totally different among the three judges..


Regards,
K.


01 Oct 2014 02:23
01 Oct 2014 02:23

A couple of things I would like to add.
1) “Something/Someone is different from Something/Someone” is the common syntax. So, I would suggest
“My favourite judge is abc, as he is totally different from the other two judges”

2) It is not a mistake; but just a matter of style.
If I were to say, I would say “...I get to learn so many things…” for “...I learn so many things…”

Just my opinion.


01 Oct 2014 09:43
Kit13
Member
01 Oct 2014 09:43

@Ninjawarrior

I agree with you completely and I had thought about both the corrections you have made. Yet, somehow the sentences did not seem wrong in my intuition. Maybe I am more accustomed to Indian English. That’s why these translation still seem correct to me. I had thought about using “unique” in the place of different as that is what the Hindi sentence means. But refrained as different would give the same sense if used with among/amongst.

And the second correction is, as you said, just a difference in the style of writing.


Regards,
K.